Warmup 9/29

Warmup 9/27

47. A. NO CHANGE B. undercuts any demanders C. undercut any demand D. and undercut the demand 48. F. NO CHANGE G. the daringest H. the most daring from J. the more daring to 49. A. NO CHANGE B. design of construction of the elevator C. elevator's design D. elevator 50. F. NO CHANGE G. if the cable had broken. H. when the cable was breaking. J. had there been a cable break. 51. A. NO CHANGE B. whom is C. whose D. his

Warmup 9/26

61. A. NO CHANGE B. is about C. are of D. are 62. F. NO CHANGE G. blooming, H. were bloomed, J. bloomed, 63. A. NO CHANGE B. arrived coming by C. arrived primarily by D. arrived through 64. F. NO CHANGE G. Due to its H. Because of there J. Owing to their 65. A. NO CHANGE B. --the yellow taxi is the most convenient way to get around in Manhattan. C. --the yellow taxi is ubiquitous in Manhattan D. OMIT the underlined portion and end the sentence with a period.

Warmup 9/23

1. A. NO CHANGE B. his C. which D. whose 2. F. NO CHANGE G. whose H. who J. that 3. A. NO CHANGE B. who C. whom D. OMIT the underlined portion 4. F. NO CHANGE G. Morisot's H. his J. the time of

Warmup 9/22

1. A. NO CHANGE B. complication process C. process that is a big complication D. complicatedest process 2. F. NO CHANGE G. exorbitance H. exorbitant J. exorbitantly 3. A. NO CHANGE B. harder C. a hardest thing D. very hard 4. F. NO CHANGE G. greatly decreased. H. decrease greatly. J. decreased greater. 5. A. NO CHANGE B. bad enough, C. more bad, D. badder enough,

Warmup 9/21

11. A. NO CHANGE B. rushing wild C. rushed wildly D. rushed wild 12. A. NO CHANGE B. rushing wild C. rushed wildly D. rushed wild 13. A. NO CHANGE B. gracefully C. more gracefully D. grace 14. A. NO CHANGE B. stupidly, C. stupidly and D. stupidly, and 15. A. NO CHANGE B. more interesting, useful C. most interesting and useful D. most useful in interest of

Peer editing checklist

IDEAS (THREE QUESTIONS) 1. Does your essay assert a focused, clearly stated thesis? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 2. Does your essay develop and support the thesis thoroughly with relevant, significant and substantial facts and quotations? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 3. Does your essay synthesize information on multiple, relevant perspectives? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature STRUCTURE (FOUR QUESTIONS) 1. Does your essay organize complex ideas so that new elements build to create a unified whole? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 2. Does your essay create an effective and engaging introduction and conclusion that articulate the significance of the topic? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 3. Does your essay use a variety of definition strategies with skill and purpose? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 4. Does your essay use a variety of meaningful transitions? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature USE OF LANGUAGE (THREE QUESTIONS) 1. Does your essay choose precise diction and a variety of sentence types and structures to enhance the reader’s understanding? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 2. Does your essay demonstrate superior command of conventions? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 3. Does your essay integrate and cite textual evidence smoothly? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature THE QUESTION (THREE QUESTIONS) These answers will not be used to determine overall score. They are simply here to help you make sure that you answered all of the questions in the prompt 1. Does your essay define your interpretation of what it means to be an American? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 2. Does your essay use the strategies of definition and different perspectives from the unit to develop a complex and thoughtful definition? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #3 name (printed) Partner #3 signature 3. Does your essay incorporate an iconic imagine? YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature YES NO Partner #2 name (printed) Partner #2 signature YES NO Partner #1 name (printed) Partner #1 signature THESIS STATEMENT (9 QUESTIONS) 1. Does your thesis statement establish an issue or a problem? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 2. Does your thesis statement appeal to a wide range of readers? YES NO Print your name Sign your name 3. Can your essay be argued or debated? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 4. Does your thesis statement express your own opinion on the issue? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 5. Is your thesis statement broad enough so that a large portion of your audience can relate? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 6. Is your thesis statement specific enough so you can zero in on a particular topic and dissect it? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 7. Does your thesis statement pick a side? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 8. Is your thesis statement focused? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name 9. Does your thesis statement have at least 3 supporting points? YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name YES NO Print your name Sign your name TEMPLATE (ONE QUESTION) DOES YOUR ESSAY FOLLOW THE TEMPLATE THAT WAS DISCUSSED IN CLASS? ESSAYS THAT DO NOT FOLLOW THE TEMPLATE WILL NOT BE ACCEPTED YES NO Print your name Sign your name Each group member should use the rubric on Page 52 to determine your score for each of the three categories. The only scores that are acceptable here are 2, 2.5, 3, 3.5, 4 (most scores will fall between 2-3) First group member (Ideas) ________ First group member (Structure) ________ First group member (Use of Language) ________ Second group member (Ideas) ________ Second group member (Structure) ________ Second group member (Use of Language) ________ Third group member (Ideas) ________ Third group member (Structure) ________ Third group member (Use of Language) ________

Warmup 9/20

6. A. NO CHANGE B. sweeter C. sweetly D. sweet, like 7. A. NO CHANGE B. closely the events C. the closely events D. close the events 8. A. NO CHANGE B. significantly the events C. the significantly events D. significant the events 9. A. NO CHANGE B. the practice of C. practically a D. practically the 10. A. NO CHANGE B. most best C. more better D. best

Warmup 9/19

1. A. NO CHANGE B. more abruptly; C. abrupter; D. abrupt; 2. A. NO CHANGE B. better. C. most. D. bestest. 3. A. NO CHANGE B. these days the world seemed all new and rosy to Peter. C. Peter saw the world these days as if it were all new and rosy. D. these days the world to Peter seems all new and rosy. 4. A. NO CHANGE B. desperation C. desperately D. despair 5. A. NO CHANGE B. sweeter, C. sweetly, D. sweet-like,

Warmup 9/14

Warmup for 9/14

1. A. NO CHANGE B. The book, as blatantly brilliant, is not about war. C. The brilliance of this book is that it is not blatantly about war. D. War is not the blatant brilliance of this book. 2. A. NO CHANGE B. young boys, to their twenties, through to high school. C. in their twenties, to when they are young boys, through to high school. D. young boys, through high school, and into their twenties. 3. A. NO CHANGE B. A beautiful read is the immersing book, in the world of phenomenal characters. C. I highly recommend the immersing characters in the phenomenal world of this beautiful book. D. The phenomenal characters immersed in this book are a beautiful thing to read, especially if you like them.

Warmup September 9

1. A. NO CHANGE B. her dream home. C. her desires. D. to her satisfaction. 2. A. NO CHANGE B. our diet C. our diets D. their diets 3. A. NO CHANGE B. and his thoughtfulness. C. and he was thoughtful, too. D. as well as the fact that he was thoughtful too. 4. A. NO CHANGE B. from C. off D. in 5. A. NO CHANGE B. bomb, the affects of which C. bomb, the affects of which, D. bomb, the effects of which

Warmup for September 8

1. A. NO CHANGE B. was, in 1949, for the first time produced, C. was first produced in 1949 D. OMIT the underlined portion 2. A. NO CHANGE B. time after time after time C. with astonishing frequency D. OMIT the underlined portion 3. A. NO CHANGE B. uncanny ability to relate C. communication D. ability to relate, to talk 4. A. NO CHANGE B. and most important, in fact C. or increasingly fundamental D. OMIT the underlined portion

Expository prompts for September 8

1) How do you account for the rise of sports figures as superstars? 2) What arguments are there for or against single parenting? 3) What does it mean to be poor? 4) Should racial profiling be legalized? Why or why not? 6) What place has television in your life? 7) Is there more or less racism in America now than there was twenty years ago? 8) If you could live in some age other than your own, which would it be and why? 9) Explain why high school athletic programs should or should not be abolished in the Hawaii public school system. 10) At Campbell High School, students should have access to electronic forms of technology during school hours. Assess the degree to which you agree or disagree with this statement.

Warmup September 7

1. A. NO CHANGE B. Although C. Owing to the fact that D. But 2. F. NO CHANGE G. George Washington, with the others H. George Washington or the others J. George Washington, yet the others 3. A. NO CHANGE B. and it was unimportant. C. because they were unimportant. D. but these things were unimportant. 4. F. NO CHANGE G. more than any H. more to any J. more or any 5. A. NO CHANGE B. Therefore, C. Yet, D. But,

Thesis for September 7

An effective thesis: -Establishes an issue or a problem -Appeals to a wide range of readers -can be argued or debated -expresses your own opinion on the issue -is broad enough so that a large portion of your audience can relate -is specific enough so you can zero in on a particular topic and dissect it -picks a side -is focused -makes claims -introduces supporting topics -has at least 3 supporting points World travel is an essential element in any young person’s well-rounded education. Eating fast food is bad and should be avoided. Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because the fast food diet leads to preventable and expensive health issues, such as diabetes, obesity, and heart disease. There are some great places to visit in Europe. More than anything else in our society, video games are responsible for the “dumbing” of America. People are dumb. When an elderly person is deciding on a pet, adopting a cat is a far better option that adopting a dog. Cats rule, dogs drool. There are high numbers of homeless people living in Berkeley, California. Homeless people in Berkeley should be given access to services, such as regular food donations, public restrooms, and camping facilities, because it would improve life for all inhabitants of the city. Secondhand smoke is bad and cause heart disease and cancer; therefore, smoking should be outlawed in public places, but outlawing smoking is unfair to smokers so maybe non-smokers can just hold their breath or wear masks around smokers instead. Secondhand smoke is just as harmful as smoking and leads to a higher prevalence of cancer and heart disease. What’s worse, people who inhale secondhand smoke are doing so without consent. For this reason, smoking in any public place should be banned. Humans should relocate to Mars. It is too late to save Earth; therefore, humans should immediately set a date for their relocation to Mars where, with proper planning, they can avoid issues of famine, war, and global warming. ID-Identify topic Claim: What you believe Direction: The general reason you believe your claim is true Thesis Educators often discuss whether high school sports have a positive influence on students. Some educators think high school sports do have a positive influence because the lessons learned from athletic competition add to the lessons learned in the classroom. Other educators think high school sports do not have a positive influence because the emphasis on sports often overshadows student achievement in other areas. In your opinion, do high school sports have a positive influence on students? The state of Illinois has been locked in a debate for several years as to whether the driving age should be raised from 16 to 18. Some people feel that 16-year-olds lack the responsibility and maturity to handle the significant privilege of driving. Others argue that 16-year-olds use their licenses for much more than social events. In your opinion, should the driving age be raised from 16 to 18? Should cell phone be banned in high school?

Warmup 9/2

10. F. NO CHANGE G. Since H. Although J. Because 11. A. NO CHANGE B. On the other hand, C. In fact, D. Yet 12. F. NO CHANGE G. However, their H. Irregardless, their J. Their 13. A. NO CHANGE B. as a result C. therefore D. consequently 14. F. NO CHANGE G. furthermore, H. though J. finally, 15. A. NO CHANGE B. because C. yet D. for

Warmup, September 1

1. A. NO CHANGE B. yet C. so D. and 2. F. NO CHANGE G. moreover H. however, J. thus 3. A. NO CHANGE B. , so C. because D. until 4. F. NO CHANGE G. although H. since J. while 5. A. NO CHANGE B. yet C. after D. since